新浪外语批改

题目 Is It Wise to Make Friends Online?

说明 Nowadays the Internet has become part of people's life, and millions of young people have made friends online.

要求1.in the first part of your writing you should present your thesis statement

2.in the second part you should support the thesis statement with appropriate details

3.in the last part you should bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

字数：200, 满分：100分

标题

请输入正文：范文1

开始计时 00:00

Currently the public has paid great attention to the debate concerning whether it is wise or not to make friends online. Taking all the favorable and unfavorable aspects into account, I stand firmly on the side that we can benefit from making friends online. This point of perspective, I believe, shared by the largest proportion of the public, can be explained in the following tangible reasons.
    Firstly, communication is unquestionably regarded as an extremely important element in our society. Unfortunately, there are people around us appear to be apathetic and have got no idea about how to make an acquaintance with a stranger. They may be too shy or nervous or they are afraid of being refused by others. But remember no man is an island entire of itself, every man is a part of the continent, a part of the main. As a consequence, regardless of the fact that whether you like it or not, as individuals, we have to be part of the main. And, internet, as a mass medium, provides us with a chance. Things turn to be quite different because sitting in front of the computer screen, people who are scared to make friends online can talk with others more naturally and confidently.
    Secondly, it is well acknowledged that we can learn a lot from our e-pals. If our friend online were a foreigner, we can practice English with him or her. What’s more, we can have a glimpse of general information of another country，such as the culture, the tradition, the custom or the geography.
    From what have mentioned above, we can come to the conclusion that making friends online can do us some good. And communication online is having a greater impact on our daily life.

分数评语：

重新输入

本结果由批改网提供，体验更多>>