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题目 College years have prepared you for your future life

说明 In a few months' time you are going to graduate from university. How do you think your college years have prepared you for your future life? Write an essay of about 400 words on the following topic: What I have learned from my years at university

要求1.in the first part of your writing you should present your thesis statement

2.in the second part you should support the thesis statement with appropriate details

3.in the last part you should bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

字数：300, 满分：100分

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As my college life is drawing to an end, it is about time to raise the question “what have I learned from my years at university？”. 
    To be frank, I did not learn too much. 
    First, as to my professional knowledge, I just followed the flow of curriculum, neither lagged behind nor excelling in the class. I only find myself better in English than in high school or than most of those non-English-majors. I can speak English, but not very fluently; I can write in English, but just some easy articles; I can understand most of the materials in the textbooks, but not very professional or colloquial expressions; I can read in English, but often need to look up words in dictionaries. 
    Secondly, I did not improve myself a lot in other qualities, such as leadership, team-spirit or communicative skills. The only society I joined was a so-called “Broadcast Art League”, in which I worked for only half a year. The only one substantial working experience was interviewing a first-prize winner in a singing contest on campus. The unreasonable pride of the singer offended me and discouraged me from working on. 
    Nor did I acquire any other abilities. I cannot work on computer skillfully. I learned nothing more than English and my second foreign language Japanese. I didn’t win any prize except one to encourage students who have made progress in their study---I once promoted my position in the class from beyond 20 to within 10. 
    So, you may say I am one of those idlers in college and may despise me. But my performance is justifiable. 
    About four years ago, an excellent high school graduate with a fairly high score in the national exams for college admission missed his target in college enrollment. He was denied the chance to enter his first-choice university and was even deprived of the chance to study his first-choice major. He was allocated to his present university to study English, which even did not happen in his dream. Coming from a poor rural family, he had neither the vision nor the power to change his fate. That student is me. 
    Therefore, I may conclude that the greatest harvest in my years in college is depression. But I do not deem it a totally negative thing. Actually, it is a kind of pressure and will transform into motivation in the future. The day I am freed from the present cage, I will utilize my freedom and choose a profession I truly like and make up for all the time I have idled away in college.
    Behind all this is a lesson I learned from my life in college, that is, however grave a setback one meets, he should not sigh over it for too long. Instead, he should collect himself in time and find out all advantages around him or find a new target and head for it with all his strength.

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